New reply from Susan Katz
<p>I would only make one suggestion. Your last line might be more powerful, and poetic, if it were to read – "The key to my castle to you (line break) "I surrender." Your poems are well written, emotionally compelling and engaging. I am delighted that you have chosen to share them with me. Your friend in poetry, Susan</p>
https://poetladykatz.com/poetry-talk/surrender
Original Post by Comfort
surrender
<p>Flag raised, white.</p>
<p>I surrender.</p>
<p>Onto you, my walls shall bow,</p>
<p>My bridges shall no longer arch,</p>
<p>My guards will hold no arms, nay, I will not have guards,</p>
<p> </p>
<p> I surrender.</p>
<p>My truth without a mask,</p>
<p>My self without remorse,</p>
<p>my castle without paint to hide my cracks,</p>
<p>onto you I surrender my whole,</p>
<p> </p>
<p>The key to my castle, I surrender to you.</p>