Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to surrender

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>I would only make one suggestion.  Your last line might be more powerful, and poetic, if it were to read – "The key to my castle to you (line break) "I surrender."  Your poems are well written, emotionally compelling and engaging.  I am delighted that you have chosen to share them with me.  Your friend in poetry, Susan</p>


Original Post by Comfort


<p>Flag raised, white.</p>
<p>I surrender.</p>
<p>Onto you, my walls shall bow,</p>
<p>My bridges shall no longer arch,</p>
<p>My guards will hold no arms, nay, I will not have guards,</p>
<p> </p>
<p>                                      I surrender.</p>
<p>My truth without a mask,</p>
<p>My self without remorse,</p>
<p>my castle without paint to hide my cracks,</p>
<p>onto you I surrender my whole,</p>
<p> </p>
<p>The key to my castle, I surrender to you.</p>