New reply from Susan Katz
<p>This is a truly intriguing poem – written in a kind of staccato rhythm that is compelling – you just want to keep reading on. "Another sip hoping I ferment and become something worth swallowing like the truth when I pass." This is a great line and the poem, overall, is one that people will want to read and reread. I know I've already read it three times.</p>
<p>Poetry, like life experience, comes in all "shapes and sizes" – you have chosen a particularly interesting form and choice of words and word clusters, to invite us into your feelings and your story.</p>
<p>Thank you so much for sharing. – Susan</p>
https://poetladykatz.com/poetry-talk/the-drunk
Original Post by Comfort
The drunk
<p>I can still taste you "he said" </p>
<p>Another drink please</p>
<p>Another escape please, another concussion to help me forget please. </p>
<p>I can still taste my sins </p>
<p>Another drink please, </p>
<p>Another relief to get me close to the reef, I'm trying to drown my… Hmmm </p>
<p>I can still lie </p>
<p>Another drink please.</p>
<p>Another way to punish myself, I deserve to suffer, yes</p>
<p>Yes.</p>
<p>Yes.</p>
<p>I deserve another drink please. </p>
<p>The alcohol whispers like a siren, calling me to the jagged rocks below. </p>
<p>Another sip hoping I ferment and become something worth swallowing like the truth when I pass. </p>
<p>Another drink please.</p>
<p>I can almost taste freedom from mine's self, or is it myself? Hmmm, I can still utter sensible words. </p>
<p>Another drink please. </p>
<p>The bottle listens better than… </p>
<p>Close to confessing it all, the pastor has nothing on Jake Daniel's… </p>
<p>Hmmm, words still echo sobriety. Maybe I'll huff and puff the lingering thoughts away. </p>
<p>Yes </p>
<p>Yes </p>
<p>Yes, </p>
<p>Another blunt please. I hope to cloud my mind so it doesn't see direction to my heart. </p>
<p>Another drink sir? </p>
<p>Yes, the blunt hugs my lungs but I seek solace that refuses to hold, alcohol loads me or is it loath me? </p>
<p>Another drink please. I seek to be nowhere yet I'm still here and so</p>
<p>Another drink please</p>