Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to The two line poem

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Very nicely done.  My suggestion for you would be to look up the poetic techniques of line break and enjambment.  Your poem would work so well if you incorporated some of these techniques.  For example:  "I want to flow with a drop / of water an infant / river sliding down / the window pane blissfully/ aimless."  I know I asked for a two line poem but this poem is asking for line breaks that help it reach its full potential.  I will, either way, consider it for featuring, in the next couple of weeks, on my Instagram page.  Thank you so much for sharing and – well done!  Your friend in poetry, Susan</p>


Original Post by Ani

The two line poem

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<p dir="ltr" style="text-align: left;">I want to flow with a drop of water,<br />An infant river<br />Sliding down the window pane<br />Blissfully aimless.</p>