Reply To: 'The Curve' by Arjit Bansal

[Susan Katz]

Very well done.  I think you have done a fine job of using and sustaining, imagery.  Your rhyme, for the most part, is not intrusive, and so it works without interfering with the rhythm and intent of the poem.  I like the progression from nature to “her” and like the part she plays in your appreciation of nature.  Unfortunately, your poem is too long for me to feature in my current request for two to four line poems, un-rhymed and using imagery.  If you would like to choose a stanza that you’d like me to feature, I would be happy to do so.  I would like to suggest, before you send anything back to me, that you go back over your poem and see if you can find words that are not needed for the rhythm, meaning, emotion, and energy of the poem.  In poetry, less is more!  Your friend in poetry, Susan