Reply To: That Step

[Susan Katz]

Nicely done.  I would like very much to see this poem written with line breaks, as that is a key part in how we read a poem.  I’m not sure where your lines begin and end and, as the reader, I need to know.  There are a couple of words that could be removed in the editing process, and I think that would benefit the rhythm (and perhaps) the meaning of the poem, as well.  You do have some very fine moments in this poem and I am grateful you chose to share it with me.  Please resubmit if you are inclined to do a bit of editing.  Your friend in poetry, Susan