Reply To: She is mine

[Susan Katz]

Very loving and very nicely done.  You have a light and appealing rhythm to your poem and certainly, a great deal of emotion.  May I suggest a couple of things that are grammatically incorrect – ” show” should be “shows” – and “throw” should be “throws” – and you might want to add the word “and” between Spring – Fall.  I think this is a very well thought-out and well-written poem – beautiful imagery.  I do very much like “the dawn show…” and your ending.  Your friend in poetry, Susan