Reply To: forget-me-not

[Susan Katz]

Many thanks for sharing this very personal and purposeful poem with me.  I can feel, as I read it, the intense emotion that suggests your deep personal connection to the words and feelings you are sharing with your reader.

“I need to first see my shadows
heal the wounds and redefine the scars.”  

This is a very powerful line.  If I may, I would suggest you tighten it a bit by compacting it into only those words that are necessary. /-indicates line break suggestions. “I need first see/ my shadows heal/ the wound redefining/ scars…”  A number of your lines could be more meaningful if they were compacted down into only those words that are necessary to get your meaning, and your feelings, across to your reader.  Poetry is:  The fewest words, in the best possible order.”

You have a very fine poem here and I will consider it for Featured Poem of the Month for December.”  Thank you again for sharing it with me.  Your friend in poetry, Susan