Reply To: I Feel

[Susan Katz]

What a very lovely, emotional. and upbeat poem.  How delightful are those feelings that you share with us, the feelings that “he” brings to you!  Thank you for submitting your poem for consideration for Featured Poem of the Month for December.

I rarely ask a poet to give us more but, in your case, I know I would find your poem more persuasive if you told us your feelings through imagery – for example: “As we bind together and fuse as one…”  “As we bind together like raindrops becoming one with the sea…”  Also, “As I “sign” with pleasure…” should be “As I “sigh” with pleasure…”

I think you have something special here and, with some editing and some inclusion of imagery (the heartbeat of any poem) you will have a truly fine poem to share.

You friend in poetry, Susan