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[Susan Katz]

Hi Sarah, I am so sorry it has taken me so long to respond to your beautiful, well-written, emotionally meaningful poem.  We have been experiencing technical difficulties and the site would not let me respond – but, here I am – thanks to my genius tech guy – he found me away around the problem, for the moment.  I have only some small suggestions –

I love you the way you might not love me (you might want to use line break to your advantage here, and break the line after “might” and then, consider using “ever”loved me or, “be able” to love me – and then, I would end the poem with “blood” – “stilled” is a bit confusing.)

Since i wrote it in blood, stilled

This is a truly lovely poem, written with the heart and soul of a poet.  Thank you so very much for sharing it with me.  And again, my apologies in the delay of this response.  Your friend in poetry, Susan