Reply To: The theology of dust

[Susan Katz]

Another powerful, intensely written poem.  Again, you have some outstanding lines – images and a fine, sustaining rhythm that keeps you moving effortlessly through the poem.  There are moments in the poem when I think less would have been more – for example:

The air is a slow confession of beginnings, (Lovely)

each mote a sermon on impermanence. (wonderful word choices)

Even silence sheds,

every stillness has a shimmer if you look long enough.  (don’t know if you need “if you look long enough.”)

Poetry is “the fewest possible words, in the best possible order.”  Your poems are, unquestionably, poetry.  But poetry is a living thing and is always open to ways to improve itself.

Again, thank you for trusting me with your poems – and for giving me such a powerful “punch” of poetry as I head off into the kitchen to do some holiday baking.

Your friend in poetry,

Susan