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    Zaina I K
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    I see around me
    Chaos surrounds me
    I see them running away
    From time and Past
    They try but can’t pass 

    They will never be in their grasps
    My need to sleep forever
    It never wavers
    Sleep so deep and peaceful
    Filled with thoughts of childhood

    The memories swarm around
    But now I can’t be found
    The change in me was so great
    It reformed my own fate
    I still am standing at hell’s gate

    Their words haunt me
    They tease and taunt me
    The want to sleep is strong
    But the feeling is so wrong
    My own thoughts make me frown

    I am now mature
    But still without cure
    Those nightmare occupy me
    They fill my mind with horror
    Can they hear my silent roar

    I cry for help
    I feel suffocated in myself
    They still don’t hear my plead
    Can’t they understand my dilemma or my need
    Am I selfish to wish to be free

    Free from my own inner clutches
    I don’t want worldly riches
    I want to cross my own bridges
    I want to be somewhere safe
    Where the situation isn’t this grave

    Freedom is what I crave for
    I want to be brave and sure
    I want to battle own wars
    Pave my own way
    Where one’s opinion doesn’t make me sway

    I will break my own leash
    And gain my inner peace
    I will win this race
    And will go through the situation I face
    This is my own Life, And I will thrive.

    ~ Zaina.I.K

     

    Note :
    This poem is on mental problems one faces.

    Ataraxis – The absence of mental stress or anxiety . Peacefulness .

    #18457
    Susan Katz
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    Thank you so very much for sharing this intense and emotional poem with me.  Mental problems, in one way or another, seem to touch us all these days.  The “battle” you describe in your poem comes vividly to life and has a frightening reality about it.  I could wish, from a purely poetic point of view, that you had used less rhyme and more imagery but, having said that, your poem speaks a powerful message and comes, I believe, straight from the heart.  I am happy to add it to the poems I am considering for Featured Poem of the Month for July.  Again, thank you for sharing your poem with me, Susan

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