Yes, you certainly have the fire that ignites poetry. This one, has some awkward wording – it’s almost as if words are missing and misplaced. “
There’s always a thousand
to mean, a thousand more to speak
born to express , not to interpret” Just not sure what this means – it needs to be clearer and that could be accomplished by putting your emotion, on the page, in the form of an image.
“behind the bars of wilting world;” – Behind the bars of a wilting world – not sure “bars” and “wilting world” are a clear combination of images for me.
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came here to hide
from the chasing spotlight (Don’t know if “chasing” is the right word here – might be a better, more powerful one…)
escaping the chains of demons
highlight me not
for a while, I plead. (Nice)
Again, thank you for sharing your work with me. I am getting the feeling you are a prolific writer. That’s great. A writer writes – that’s the only way for us to unburden ourselves, and reach out to connect with others. I’m honored that you reached out to connect with me, Susan
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