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    You are the reason of my smile, when beloved are far away miles.
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    Susan Katz
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    Thank you for submitting your poem.  May I suggest a grammatical correction or two – “You are the reason FOR my smile – “when my beloved is miles away.”  Just a thought that might help the emotions of your poem translate better for those reading it in English.  I appreciate your interest in poetladykatz and look forward to seeing more of your work, Susan

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