Thank you for sharing this very romantic and delightfully honest poem. I would suggest, if I may, that the last word in the poem should be “them” not “it” if you are referring to “your eyes.” (Plural) Or, you could just end the line with the word “in.” That would work too. A very fine example of a short poem that creates an image for us to feel as well as understand. I will be featuring your poem in one of my poetladykatz Instagram posts, in the next couple of weeks. Your friend in poetry, Susan
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