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[Aaliya Akhun]

When I write,
My hands fall short,

Of the suppressed emotions,

I let out,

The moment catharsis occurs,

Is the minute when pen divulges the paper.

 

 

[Susan Katz]

Very nice – concise and meaningful.  I’m a little confused, however, by your last line – “…when pen divulges the paper.”  I’m not sure “divulge” is the right word.  “Deluge” meaning to “flood” the paper might be more appropriate.  Just a thought.  Thank you so very much for sharing your work with me.  Your friend in poetry, Susan

[Aaliya Akhun]

Thank you so much for placing your expertise comments, I will gladly create more poems to be a much better writer.

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