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    shwetamahani
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    Love is all about you

    Your eyes speaks a lot

    Being the rarest of all

    I fell in love with your soul

    Ahh, the purest form

    You reside in my poem.

    -Shweta Mahani

    #18543
    Susan Katz
    Keymaster

    I really love your last line!  What a beautiful tribute to someone, to have fallen in love with their “soul” and have both that love and their soul “reside in my poem.”  Very well done and I would just like to suggest that the words ” a lot” at the end of the second line, really don’t add anything to the poem and could easily be removed, giving the poem a “lighter” move lyrical feeling.  I will definitely be considering your poem for featuring on my poetladykatz Instagram page, one day in the next two weeks.  Thank you so very much for sharing your work with me. Your friend in poetry, Susan

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