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    Menal Jain
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    By the bedside I saw
    The yolk sinking deep into the sea
    She pulled up the bedsheet
    Getting ready to narrate a fantasy

    She has a style to say things
    Maybe the talk of characters
    The feelings they depict
    Always makes her falter

    Through all these years
    The thing I learnt for sure
    Is not to conclude to happy endings
    As an end was never a cure

    The dream house by the sea
    And spending the day on swings
    A little daughter treated like a doll
    She cares and cares over the top

    Friday visits to that building
    Waiting for a positive response
    The room where she stays a month
    Haunts my rest at home

    She seldom talks to others
    Likes repeating herself as well
    They call her psychotic
    Maybe she hardened her shell

    The drips by the corner
    The screams I heard
    I witnessed the efforts she made
    To maintain the cruel fantasy world

    The stories she narrated and heard
    All depicted the cruel world
    Maybe neglected by the ending
    She struggles and struggles a lot
    Trying to escape the fantasy!

    #18623
    Susan Katz
    Keymaster

    This is a very deep and very emotional poem.  I’m not sure I’m able to follow your message as well as you would like but, then again, that may be your intention.  There are some very well written moments and some fine images and throughout, you maintain a level of razor sharp emotional intensity.  I thank you very much for sharing your work with me.  Your friend in poetry, Susan

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