Good Morning from Connecticut, USA. Thank you for sending me your “March” poem. I very much like the gentle rhythm of it and the quiet, but clear message. However, there are a couple of suggestions I would like to make.
A call in March,
By the honouring blooms, (This does not translate well into English -“honored” blooms would work)
The time to vanish wrath, (Is it “the” time or “A” time?
The time for foe and friends, (Is it “the” time or “A” time?)
While strolling over whispering birds! (We would not stroll “over” birds – that would be stepping on them – we might stroll to the sound of whispering birds.)
If you would like to make some edits, please resubmit and I will consider your poem for a future “featured poem” – probably the last week in March.
Thank you for sending and for your interest in https://www.poetladykatz.com – Susan
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