Strength Of Hope

[SriSougandhika]

I will stay here for eternity,

Don’t you worry a bit,

I’ll be the mighty sky and you be the seamless sea,

We are separated indeed, still meet at the horizon in glee.

[Susan Katz]

Thank you for sharing this very well conceived poem using imagery.  My one concern is the word “glee”” that seems somehow to be there because it rhymes, not so much for the meaning it adds to the poem.  Please remember, poetry does not have to rhyme to be poetry.  I am impressed with the rest of your poem and, if you would consider another word for the ending, would be happy to consider it for featuring in a future Instagram, poetladykatz post.  I am very grateful for your interest in what I do here, and I am, your friend in poetry, Susan

[SriSougandhika]

Strength Of Hope (edited version)

 

I will stay here for eternity,

Don’t you worry a bit,

I’ll be the mighty sky and you be the seamless sea, 

We are separated indeed, still meet at the horizon.

Let the love become the indestructible bond,

Unbroken forever and ever.

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