The winter crowd

[Divyangana Bhadra]

It’s again a busy day,

monday blues as we call it.

He fixed the tie only to feel a hindrance around his neck.

People with slouched shoulders, wrinkled foreheads

eyes on the logos of engagement.

The bitter sweet rays of the winter sun

illuminated her tired face.

Made her eyelids heavy,

From all of yesterday’s late night-

The deadline madness.

 

Running in circles, people with geometric faces,

pied piper of life

endless rat-race.

Fast paced cars blowing off smokes

the city air is bristled with greyish dreams,

choked voices.

Heaviness of dirt settled on the

facet of leaves, the green-numbing cold

disrupted photosynthesis.

Of love, longing and hope

this crowd only dares to whisper.

 

A pause, a detour against the flow

brought me to this wonderland.

Flesh and bones – like an alchemist’s art mingled into one

the night before, might be a lovers spat.

The sparrows are in the search of food,

cold breeze and chirpings cuts the silence

erratic rythymns.

 

The joggers are on a routine journey

swaying to the forbidden tune.

The morning market is quite a scene

You call necessity, I see an artist’s palette.

By winter’s boon

the canvas is bountiful.

Jaggery – the sweet crumbles, it feels like a mother’s touch.

I made small earthen pots of these,

when I open the lids

this crowd penetrates and lingers in

my soul,

Even after I shed off the skin of

the parched being.

 

[Susan Katz]

Taking a break, on a rainy/snowy Monday, and decided to check in with my website.  I found your very beautifully written poem waiting for me.  Your poem “strolls” through a series of intimate observations of self, of others, and of life in the process of being lived.  You have some strong and meaningful lines and they lead us through your, poet’s eye, appraisal of what you see – more importantly, what you feel.  If I may, I would like to suggest a couple of small things…  “smokes” should be smoke – not plural – / don’t know if you need “as we call it” as we know that because it is what you called it – / – “late night” should be “nights” because you have indicated by using “yesterday’s” that there is more than one night – / “;the city air is bristled with greyish dreams” is great!  “Greyish” should be spelled with an “a”. This crowd only dares to whisper” is also a great line.  “The sparrows are in search of food” don’t need the “the.”  “Cold breeze and chirpings “cut” not “cuts” the silence.”  Perhaps “you name necessity” rather than “calls.”

I am really impressed with this poem.  It shows me that you have the eye and the heart of a poet.  I would be happy to feature your poem, next week, in the Featured Poem of the Week section on my website.  I would be pleased if you would consider some of the suggestions I made – please let me know – but, either way, I would feature it, with your permission.  Your friend in poetry, Susan

[Divyangana Bhadra]

Thankyou soo much for considering my poem to be featured on your website. I would definitely make the changes suggested by you. So, after the changes , should I post the poem in the chat room?

Another request , if you can just tag me the poem. My Instagram handle is @bdivyangana.

[Susan Katz]

Good Morning, When you have edited your poem, please submit it here, in the Chat Room. It may be too late to get it in for this week – but I will try, If it is, we will feature it the following week. I will make sure you are tagged. You have talent and I am so happy to be able to share that here at https://www.poetladykatz.com – Susan

[Susan Katz]

Good Afternoon – Just to let you know, we are working to feature your poem this week. If we can get it up in time, it will appear this Friday – 1/21/2022 Just to let you know, the site will automatically correct misspellings and grammatical errors. Again, thank you for sharing this very well written poem, -Susan

[Divyangana Bhadra]

Okay. Thats great🌻🌻
So I don't have to edit it , right?
Thank you for appreciating my poem.

[Susan Katz]

As I mentioned, grammatical errors will be automatically corrected. Otherwise, I very much like your poem and will publish it in the form you sent. We will also post your tag on Instagram.

[Divyangana Bhadra]

Okay. Thats great.

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