Trojan horse

[Comfort]

What is this?tis not a warrior yet my walls it’s entered
What thou betoken? tis omen?…nay tis new beginning?
I at a state of tizzy know not what to do
My kingdom rains yet the sun shines, flowers bloom yet it is not spring
My armour stripped, I reach for thee but an enemy I hope tis not

[Susan Katz]

Thou has written a very “medieval” poem with language that might be heard in a Shakespearean play.  I feel the emotional commitment in your poem and there are some lovely images (My kingdom rains (reins?)yet the sun shines, flowers bloom yet it is not spring…)

I do like your ending, which I feel is a bit serious, a bit tongue in cheek.  Some very lovely things here and I suspect, were you to decide to, you could write some very meaningful and impressive, contemporary poetry.

Thank you so much for sharing, Susan

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