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    AYESHA SHAHID
    Participant

    What is in your eyes.. 

    I really can’t understand what keeps me enticed. 

    But it has something that pierced my heart and soul… 

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    Susan Katz
    Keymaster

    Thank you for submitting your poem.  I like the tone of your poem and the suggestiveness of it.  Grammatically, I believe, in the last line “is” would work better than “has.”  You have a good sense of the rhythm of poetry and the need for emotional commitment to your words and thoughts.  I would be happy to consider your poem, after editing, to be featured on my Instagram page.  Your friend in poetry, Susan

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