[Being_oasis]

Thank you so much for reading my poem and giving such intricate details, i have been submitting poems on your page since a year and your teachings have helped me improve a lot. I did the necessary corrections you asked for. Hope you like it.

Ps: really looking forward to learn more about poetry from you.
tysm 🙂

[Being_oasis]

hi!
i can finally conclude that i “finished” the poem
just to give you a brief about the poem a short summary kind of thing so that you are able to get an idea about what i am trying to say
The poem takes us on a voyage through the eyes of a man who is looking out his and he remembers his past how he was a child who had no extraordinary abilities.
An innocent soul who just had the power of original thinking with which he live half his childhood
The boy was enjoying his childhood his freedom doing what he liked but then the mighty men metaphor to all parents who take their child away from their imagination and bashes their ideas their original thinking confining them to a syllabus of school or college destroying their power to think and just making them a robot who is left to care for himself in a world for which he was never prepared for with a programmed mindset.
I hope i was able to explain to you well enough , if not please forgive me

Regards,

Owais

[Being_oasis]

hi!
i can finally conclude that i “finished” the poem
just to give you a brief about the poem a short summary kind of thing so that you are able to get an idea about what i am trying to say
The poem takes us on a voyage through the eyes of a man who is looking out his and he remembers his past how he was a child who had no extraordinary abilities.
An innocent soul who just had the power of original thinking with which he live half his childhood
The boy was enjoying his childhood his freedom doing what he liked but then the mighty men metaphor to all parents who take their child away from their imagination and bashes their ideas their original thinking confining them to a syllabus of school or college destroying their power to think and just making them a robot who is left to care for himself in a world for which he was never prepared for with a programmed mindset.
I hope i was able to explain to you well enough , if not please forgive me

Regards,

Owais☺

[Being_oasis]

will not let you down😊

[Being_oasis]

i am extremely obliged for my errors as i am not very good at typing. i have removed all the ills please see to it once more

[Being_oasis]

I am so glad that you read all of my poems as there are hardly any people who likes to read poetry in my school or locality.
Thanks a lot Susan

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