Thank you for these comments! I don’t really share my poetry ( as I’m hoping to ‘release’ them one day in something even more artistic like into a arty film) but it’s always good to get extra insight especially from the wiser:) thanks again for your compliments nd your in depth comment – it has made my day. I’m glad you think it has potential. I’ll make those changes to my poem, and I’ll keep practicing!
Also i see what you mean about the coffee line, I wanted to express the potential everything has. If a cup of coffee can be warm and cold thus it has – potential. It’s state is always changing. I was thinking of both the coffee and the sun as sort of being in everything and everywhere. It coffee has absorbed the sunlight and its now become that. Maybe I need a better metaphor:D
