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Anew, yet in doom! (1 reply)

RG983
4 months ago
RG983 4 months ago

Anew, yet in doom!

Pious patina of life’s passion,

In shades of worries & wonders;

Finds fullness, in nature’s casket,

Kissing the crest, heaven anigh.

Am that gale of monsoon, O greeting golden grains,

In the camouflage of dazzle, from camellia to camomile;

Smearing fragrance exotic, or colours decked bright,

Painting thoughts in this clouds, as if an artist were I.

In the bosom of mine bower, blushes cherries as red wine,

& robins, in disguise, art announcing endless love;

From thickets, even hosting lil’ cicadas at choir,

Inking tales, am immersed, in divine idle pleasure.

Vagabond in the vales, I indulge in brewing beauty

Luring mine soul with the bird of paradise;

In iris, I imbibe idyllic passion,

Imitating the tale of immortal insight.

Beyond flaws, beyond doubts, beyond spheres of existence-

Inebriated mine soul, by shades of wondrous horizon;

Which fountain the fashion of unfathomable creation,

Letting dive into the blossoms, anew yet in doom.

R.G.

 

 

 

 

 

Susan Katz
4 months ago
Susan Katz 4 months ago

Thank you for sending.  There are some beautiful moments in your poem.  You have used alliteration - almost to perfection, in some instances.  "In the camouflage of dazzle, from camellia to camomile;"  "Pious patina of life’s passion, / In shades of worries & wonders;"

I am truly impressed with the way you articulate your way through the poem - English I presume, is a second language - and yet, you manage to use it very well to express yourself through the art of poetry.  There are some moments when I stumble over the wording but, having said that, your poem is really very, very good.  I will definitely consider it for the week of March 4th when my theme (and now you know before anyone else) will be "The Moods of March."  I am very impressed with your poetic skills. 

May I suggest you go through your poem and look for moments when the poem could be edited a bit - taking out a word here or there and, checking the grammatical implications of words and word combinations.  A poem is always a work in progress.

Thank you so much for sharing, Susan

 

 

 

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