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My Destiny (1 reply)

Candice
3 years ago
Candice 3 years ago

Dreams within me

Hoping to see it come true

The reason of my bliss

Yes, the secret is all of this

To fly so high flapping my wings

Into the deep sinking sea

I recall how I rose up

Amidst all the barriers

And trials immense.

All I wanted and ought to be,

Surprising it turned out to be.

Nothing but my destiny.

 

The journey was too long

So, exhausting to carry along

My never-ending burdens

Dissatisfaction maybe

Each time I persevere

With dedication and sincerity.

I get to know it’s incomplete

And room for improvement.

All I needed is guidance

For what was right and just.

That’s the motivation

That carved my destiny.

Candice M

Susan Katz
3 years ago
Susan Katz 3 years ago

Hi Candice,  So nice to hear from you in the format of your very strong and meaningful poem.  I do have a number of suggestions - and they have to do with the concept in poetry that, less is more.  In other words, if you can say something in two words, don't use five.  A few examples - "Dreams within me/ hoping they come true"  "The reasons for my bliss/ the secret of all this..."  Just a few examples of how you could tighten your poem and by doing so, strengthen it - make it more powerful.  Prose is an open hand, poetry is a closed fist.  Thank you so much for sharing - please send again, when you have had a chance to work a bit on it.  I do so appreciate your interest in Poet Lady Katz.  You friend in poetry, Susan

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