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Soul of infinite burdens (1 reply and 1 comment)

therelatingfeel
3 years ago
therelatingfeel 3 years ago

Oh soul of infinite burdens 

I know you have to keep strong 

Because this society is so disgraceful

I know you have so much pain

You are crying so deep in heart

But this society doesn't accept your tears

It will humiliate you tease you let this not bother you anymore

So boy get up you are also a soul

You do have a heart with lots of emotions

Spell them out and and let tears flood through eyes

Let pain come out and show yes we have emotions too

 

©therelatingfeel

therelatingfeel

Susan Katz
3 years ago
Susan Katz 3 years ago

Thank you so much for sharing your poem with me.  It is filled with honest emotion and humanity.  I would suggest, for the sake of the poem, that you try to find places where you could, perhaps, use an image instead of telling us.  Let me give you an example:

"society is rusted and disgraced" - "let tears flood your eyes like summer rain..."  A poem becomes accessible when we can see, hear, taste, feel, and even smell the feelings you are writing about.  You have a strong poem - I think you could make it even stronger.  I will, of course, consider your poem for Featured Poem of the Month for December.

Your friend in poetry, Susan

 

 

therelatingfeel
3 years ago

This honest review means aton lot to me.
Thank you for giving hope to my poetry to fly high....
Forever grateful looking forward

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