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That day of the year. (1 reply)

nadianeyaz123@gmail.com
3 years ago

Smoking out frustrated thoughts

Neglecting the fact thee life is short

Whats coming is almost evident

Blurred eyes, mind seems confident

Of different lights and different shades

Hoarding memories before it fades

Remnant energy mingling with smoke

Tends Bothering heart, which is broke

Life’s all about Misconceptions and wine

Inhaling smoke make things fine

And Smirking can be like grenades

Heathers growing betwixt two barricades

Merriment making asinine decisions

Sobbing eyes, oriented vision

Shrieking like no one’s around

Darkness, only place i found

                                       - NADIA NEYAZ 

Susan Katz
3 years ago
Susan Katz 3 years ago

Hi Nadia - thank you for submitting your emotional poem for consideration for Featured Poem of the Month for December.  Your poem has a strong message and a comfortable flow but, there are some moments in the poem, when the English word or combination of words, and the tense (present/past/future) is incorrect.  For example: "Neglecting the fact thee life is short..."  The word "thee" should be "that" to be read correctly in English.

"Hoarding memories before it fades..."  "Memories" is plural, meaning more than one, therefore "fades" should be "fade" - "Bothering" should possibly be "bothered"  and "broke" should, to be correct, be "broken."

All of the elements of a very fine poem are here and are just waiting for the hand of the "editor" side of the poet, to jump in and start working on tightening and correcting and turning the first version of the poem, into the finished version of the poem.  I feel your intensity and do believe, you have writing talent.  Thank you again, for sharing your work with me,  Susan

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