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The snake that hissed!đź’” (1 reply)

Yash._14
2 years ago
Yash._14 2 years ago

Right now,
Nothing can be fixed,
And no one can't be missed,

We both remember the day we first kissed,
And the day when i hold your wrist,

Walking together in the mist,
Was a snake there that hissed,

He bit me on the fist,
The poison got on me unkissed

Without giving a gist
You left me alone like i never exist...

Yash

 
Susan Katz
2 years ago
Susan Katz 2 years ago

Thank you for submitting your poem for consideration for Featured Poem of the Month for December.  I truly appreciate the intense emotion in your poem.  I sense that this poem comes from a very honest, and very heartfelt place.  I would suggest that you spend less time working on rhyme and more time working on images, images that will help us feel what you feel.  Poetry should not tell us how to feel, it should show us through the magic and power of imagery.  The idea of the snake is really good.  Now, expand on that through imagery - "in the mist/ hissing and poised to strike/ a snake uncoiled/ like a promise broken...

I believe you have a fine poem just about ready to break free, given time and the work of the poet, editing.  We all love to write - that's the fun part - but, editing, now that's where the poem is truly born.

Your friend in poetry, Susan

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