Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to Introducing myself….

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Thank you for sharing.  This is a delightful poem!  I like the journey you take us on and I loved your ending.  If I were to suggest anything, it would be to try to tighten and smooth our your rhymes.  While poetry, of course, need not rhyme, I understand your desire to tell your story in rhyme – it adds a kind of "poetic" emphasis.  The one place I think needs a little editing is:</p>
<p>to save her from another child</p>
<p>she knew this one was very wild!  (this line is a little off in "rhythm" – perhaps something like "fearing this one would be wild!")  Just a suggestion.</p>
<p>Thank you so much for being a part of www.poetladykatz.com – and I look forward to seeing more of your work.  Your friend in poetry, Susan</p>


Original Post by Lila

Introducing myself….

<p>June 5th, 1953</p>
<p>Lila van der Raadt 2021</p>
<p> </p>
<p>Born under the beam of tractor lights,</p>
<p>on a “dark and stormy night”.</p>
<p>Frightened siblings in the Ford</p>
<p>mother praying to her lord</p>
<p>to save her from another child</p>
<p>she knew this one was very wild!</p>
<p>This one made six</p>
<p>she could not fix</p>
<p>her broken world</p>
<p>so she thanked her god</p>
<p>it was a girl!</p>