Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to La previsión (The anticipation)

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Thank you for sharing this remarkably emotionally intense and personal poem.  You have taken us on a journey into your heart, as well as your mind.  I was very moved.  The one thing I might suggest, is that your poem, to truly capture the essence of poetry, could use some imagery.  Instead of telling us everything you want us to know, show us – make us feel – be part of the experience, through imagery.  Example: "</p>
<p>I’ve had anticipation for this day</p>
<p>Ever since I could remember      </p>
<p>"I have waited on the edge of hope / trembling in the storm</p>
<p>of despair for a torrent of days</p>
<p>that lie heaped in memory.</p>
<p>This is just an "off the top of my head" example and I'm sure you can do much better.  What poets need to do is incorporate the five senses, and emotion, into their poems – make us see, hear, taste, touch, and smell your thoughts, your hopes, your fears, your desires and, in your case, your ultimate victory.  Do keep on writing – do keep on using poetry as a way to speak your truth – and thank you, so very much, for sharing with me.  I am grateful to have had the chance to "get to know you" through your poem.  Your friend in poetry, Susan</p>


Original Post by agooddaytoflourish

La previsión (The anticipation)

<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">My stomach is soft and I am ok</span></p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">I hug my warm body</span></p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">And let my inner child know that she is not alone</span></p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">I remind her that I am safe</span></p>
<p> </p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">My demons despise me</span></p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">They hate the fact that I’m living</span></p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">Because I never felt worthy of love</span></p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">Or anything that didn’t make me skinny</span></p>
<p> </p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">I remember looking through the window</span></p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">With tears in my eyes</span></p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">I wiped them away</span></p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">As I realized that I don’t deserve to die </span></p>
<p> </p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">I’ve had anticipation for this day</span></p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">Ever since I could remember</span></p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">I have wanted to find that little girl</span></p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">And I am finally able to get her</span></p>
<p> </p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">It does get easier, my darling</span></p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">Your wounds will soon heal</span></p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">You are worthy of seeing </span></p>
<p><span style="font-weight: 400;">The bright future that lies ahead of your being</span></p>
<p> </p>