Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to Longing revelation

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Thank you so very much for sharing your poetry with me.  Your poem has a strong presence and some powerful lines (</p>
<p>As the sea bashes it's head</p>
<p>Against the shore before a hurricane</p>
<p>There is strong imagery here and in some of your other lines as well.  If I were to offer an editing suggestion, it would be to go back through the poem, removing all words that are not necessary to the power, purpose, and flow of the poem.</p>
<p>Your friend in poetry, Susan</p>


Original Post by Fahad Khalique

Longing revelation

<p>I don't know about others, but </p>
<p>As anything puts all efforts</p>
<p>To come into existence; like </p>
<p>A tiny seed tears apart </p>
<p>The hard soil before growing</p>
<p>Same way; like </p>
<p>A mother experiences latitude</p>
<p>Before bearing a child</p>
<p>And the gestural condition of </p>
<p>A Prophet before devine revelation</p>
<p>Like; a volcano turns red, ferocious</p>
<p>And fierce before eruption</p>
<p>As the sea bashes it's head </p>
<p>Against the shore before a hurricane</p>
<p>The contingency of independence</p>
<p>That creates turmoil and resistance</p>
<p>Before holding it's final status</p>
<p>The same way I feel </p>
<p>Untill and unless,</p>
<p>I indite my mental milieu</p>
<p>On the paper; which turns </p>
<p>Into a poetry. </p>