Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to Matters ~ Ash

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Interesting little poem that seems to be a kind of "self awareness" moment.  I like it and though it moves simply from line to line, it does get your message across.  I would, perhaps, like to see an image or two in your poem – for example (mind still unclear – as what – unclear as cloudy water, a cloud filled sky, mist on the mountains…?)  Poetry should be visual, should paint pictures for us and I think your poem has all the possibility of being a very fine poetic picture.  I will be considering your poem for featuring in a future poetladykatz Instagram page post, but would love to see it resubmitted with some editing with an eye towards imagery.  Your friend in poetry, Susan</p>


Original Post by RelicDJames

Matters ~ Ash

<p style="text-align: center;">A whisper I hear even when am</p>
<p style="text-align: center;">By myself</p>
<p style="text-align: center;">Mind unstill unclear </p>
<p style="text-align: center;">With true, false, and the rest.</p>