Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to Rebel – The Feud Struggle, Afsana Noushad

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Thank you for submitting your poem to be considered for Featured Poem of the Month, for June.  You have some lovely lines in your poem.  I particularly liked "some simply left with a bland body" and "I opened my arms to the fragile colours."  Thank you for sharing this intensely felt poem with me, Susan</p>


Original Post by _darkfader_

Rebel – The Feud Struggle, Afsana Noushad

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<p>They came-<br />All at once, straight ahead</p>
<p>Valiant self started to deplete~<br />Looked at my fellow comrades,<br />Dauntless and intrepid look buried their distress and anxiety filled eyes.<br />Yet- repentance never impeded its way.</p>
<p>Anticipation to procure the war,<br />was alone a mindless thought?<br />Battleground thronging with gunshots~<br />Smokes and ashes everywhere I turn to fight,<br />Unveiled my face with conviction to nothing but a mere soul.</p>
<p>"Among thy fears did I feel,<br />Nor, misery! did I know till then,<br />Petrified to elude from me<br />What love I bore to thee" <br />And she, I cherish linger'd upon herself.<br />Her letters' comfort concealed me within firm spirit;<br />For there I needed it, when I set my sail off to war.</p>
<p>'Tis blood covered o'er the path,<br />Bodies of comrades laid down,<br />Some crying upon torment and pain, <br />Some simply left with a bland body.<br />Voices of their sorrowful weep filled up the air,<br />With clouds darkening and crows howering;<br />whilst the battle continued at its peak.</p>
<p style="text-align: left;">Amidst the image of fatal and killing,<br />want'd this battle to end; <br />'Tis with a loud thud that ceased.<br />Tried to keep my hope up,<br />while her picture float'd away into the light. <br />and as I opened my arms to the fragile colours.</p>