Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to That Step

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Nicely done.  I would like very much to see this poem written with line breaks, as that is a key part in how we read a poem.  I'm not sure where your lines begin and end and, as the reader, I need to know.  There are a couple of words that could be removed in the editing process, and I think that would benefit the rhythm (and perhaps) the meaning of the poem, as well.  You do have some very fine moments in this poem and I am grateful you chose to share it with me.  Please resubmit if you are inclined to do a bit of editing.  Your friend in poetry, Susan</p>


Original Post by Shipra Raphael

That Step

<p>The bone of sanguinity was becoming stronger, when she began to contemplate and act. Dishevelled and quivering mind now stealthily stepping towards the door of composure.</p>