Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to The Monster!

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Thank you for submitting this very intense poem.  Such strong feelings come through and you have maintained the mood all throughout the poem.  I do believe your poem would benefit from imagery.  Words like "important" could be transformed into an image that would help the reader become more involved in the poem and the emotions.  "Important" as what?  You feel like a "God" or  "storm clouds" that block the sun.  You have an abundance of feeling in your poem, now give us some beautiful word pictures so we can experience your words on a sensory level.  Really enjoyed reading your poem and thank you again, for sharing.  – Susan</p>


Original Post by Sushmita Sarma

The Monster!

<p class="p1"><span class="s1">You cry, you yell, you snarl, you fidget…</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">You fight it with all the strength that you gather within…</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">You sit in dilemma, pretending to decide to not know what it is…</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Whilst your mind does and so does your heart…</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">At one instance, You want to break the chain and stop the pain…</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">At another, You cling onto it knowing, its a part of you..</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Weren’t you taught to love yourself with all that you got? – flaw or perfection?</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">You do you, they say – you don’t understand how.. </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Probably you do, but don’t you think that is all you have left of the world? </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">You’ve feared companionship and have craved it simultaneously…</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Doesn’t this seem like the game of hide and seek, where you feel belonged?</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">You feel ‘important’, for you know they are the only ones true to you?</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">They pay a visit even when you least ask for it…</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">May be that is why you decide to let it remain, but with a condition…</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">You control them, and not they control You! </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">You control the Monster!</span></p>