Poet Lady Katz: new forum comment on FINE LINE

New comment from Bagath Manish

Oh this is good, you really seem to have a style in your prose, but please do try to avoid the cliched format and various cliched comparison!

https://poetladykatz.com/poetry-talk/fine-line

Original Post by Alina sadh

FINE LINE

<p class="p1"><span class="s1">I am a part of your unforgettable memory,</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Waiting for someone to pave the way is time in vein, </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Be your own knight in shining armour to get away.</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Most senseless things starts to make sense when in love,</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Loosing it takes all the sense away as it was never the one .</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Everything sounds like a melody when in love</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">It hurts when the melody itself could not be heard.</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Sooth like northern lights,</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Without it even the yellow light makes us cry.</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Darkest nights seems star lit with one’s presence ,</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Makes it difficult to see the brightest moon when one flees.</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Makes rainbow appear even in the worst of storm,</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Leaves with the fear of even the lightest gust .</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">It provides the fun one gets in bookclub,</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">When leaves takes the fond of books and the club.</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Loving someone is easy ,than getting loved</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Before loving someone love yourself first.</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Beauty Lies in the<span class="Apple-converted-space">  </span>eyes of beholder,</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Leaves us empty even to look that way.</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">As leisurely it feels, </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">It makes you bleed.</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">It feels like spring when it hits,</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">And leaves us colder like winter breeze.</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">It comes faster ,than it can leave</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">It’s all gloomy in the start,</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">gets grey when it blows.</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">It’s not something to be concurred , </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">It is to be felt.</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">It hurts to face the reality,</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Thats why Imaginations are all we want to believe in.</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">With time it all starts to struck,</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">That you were the only one who ever loved,</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Difference is almost next to none.</span></p>

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<p>Thank you for submitting your very heartfelt poem for consideration as Featured Poem of the Week.  I hope you have a very lovely and very creative day, Susan</p>