New reply from Susan Katz
<p>You certainly managed to get a lot of information and emotion into your poem and I thank you very much for sharing it with me. It is too long for me to consider for featuring on my Instagram page, for this week's poetry submission feature. I would, as I have said to many others, suggest you back off a bit on the rhyme and try to incorporate more in the way of imagery (metaphor and simile.) Poetry should make us see, hear, taste, touch, and smell and then, react emotionally. You have all the ingredients for a very fine poem, you just need to do the hard job, all poets must do, of editing. Thank you again for sharing your work with me, Susan</p>
https://poetladykatz.com/poetry-talk/404-humanity-not-found
Original Post by tanvilad
404: HUMANITY NOT FOUND
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Human life is such a shame</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Everyone around is only playing the game of blame </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Fights on Religion and caste and what not </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">The vein of humanity is about to clot </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Sitting home during this virus and criticising is so simple</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">The doctors are still trying to fight with smiles and dimple</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Is politics superior than lives? </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">It's better to suicide with a knife</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Attacks on doctors and Stone throws </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Is this how our country should grow? </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">God has entered the body of doctors it seems </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">And your cribbing for not being able to go to gyms </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Co operation is all they need </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Let's unite together and plant the humanity seed </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">Doctors are sacrificing their lives for others </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">And you want to Rome around and gather </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">So many worries and a year full of cries </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">And still you want some cheesy fries </span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1">The base and foundation within us is slipping as if we are standing on Grease</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1"> Pray for ones who are gone and may their souls rest in peace!</span></p>
<p class="p1"><span class="s1"><span class="Apple-converted-space"> </span>— Tanvi Lad</span></p>