New reply from Susan Katz
<p>Thank you so much for this very heartfelt poem (or musings) – it captures such a nostalgic mood, a sense of something lost or left behind – something, I think all of us can relate to. If you were to want to work on this and turn it into a poem, it would need some editing, some thought as to how to express some of these emotions through imagery, metaphor and simile, but you certainly do have some fine work here and it could become, I believe, a fine poem.</p>
<p>Thank you so much for sharing with me. Your friend in creative writing of all kinds, Susan</p>
https://poetladykatz.com/poetry-talk/a-new-start-aura-of-memories
Original Post by Nandini Jha
A NEW START … AURA OF MEMORIES ..
<p style="text-align: center;">Enthralling beauty of the waves kept my eyes mesmerized <br />Smell of roses was enough to make me realise it still wasn't heaven <br />The dead pieces of shells pricked me <br />The noisy beach seamed noiseless <br />Lost in my own thoughts <br />It wasn't the right time I realised someone was at their top notch of voice <br />It was a line to address 15</p>
<p style="text-align: center;">Address 15 nothing much special<br />But a bunch of memories <br />Diaries full of talks <br />Nights spent under the sky <br />Moments that turned into memories <br />But still make me feel everything again</p>
<p style="text-align: center;">Collecting my bits and pieces it was the time to move ahead <br />To address 15 <br />Wasn't easy to leave back the beauty of waves <br />It was my final good bye to waves <br />It was my last visit to address 15 <br />Collecting my cherished moments <br />I decided not to be back again</p>
<p style="text-align: center;">Parting away from a person is easy <br />But their memories still make us a different person <br />Heading to address 15 wasn't as easy as I thought <br />Those flowers still bloomed <br />Lilies gazing like they used to <br />Smiling toddlers could make me smile too <br />The chit chats that never ended on the way <br />Chocolate ice cream still is a best seller</p>
<p style="text-align: center;">And finally to address 15 <br />Still with our names engraved <br />Still with a stupid painting hanging at the entrance</p>
<p style="text-align: center;">Still echoed with our smiles <br />Our voices still reverbed in the room <br />But then it was no more a thing to be happy about</p>
<p style="text-align: center;">I walked away from the doorstep without any noise <br />It was my terminal goodbye to the lilies I cherised <br />Gardens that made me happy <br />The vines that created a charismatic aura <br />And a pleasing sunset that could make your day <br />This is how address 15 though not that special but invaluable<br />A bouquet of priceless memories </p>
<p>Not a poem but emotions penned down .. </p>
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