Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to FLOWER VASE

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Thank you for sharing your work with me.  There are some lovely moments in your poem, but I believe you may have some difficulty with the grammatical rules of English, such as tenses.  Take some time to go over your poem and see if you can tighten and clarify it, by changing, adding, or deleting some words/phrases to give it a more meaningful translation into English.  I do think you will have a delightful "word picture" poem here after you've spent some time, as all poets must, editing.  Your friend in poetry, Susan</p>


Original Post by Sanmeet Kaur Sarna


<p>The moment I enter my room</p>
<p>My eyes they rest upon that vase</p>
<p>The one that stands by window to</p>
<p>Announce I've got some pretty flowers.</p>
<p> </p>
<p>The floral print all over it</p>
<p>Matches well with daisies white</p>
<p>I sometimes add more colours to</p>
<p>The bunch of flowers I put inside.</p>
<p> </p>
<p>The corner where it stands so still</p>
<p>Looks lively all through seven days</p>
<p>Though bees and birds often visit</p>
<p>But butterflies have special gaze.</p>