New reply from Susan Katz
<p>Thank you Candice for sending again. I think this work well. I wonder if you have ever thought about "line break." For example – instead of having your rhymes come at the end of each line – how about trying this…</p>
<p>Dreams within hoping</p>
<p>to be true reaching the skies</p>
<p>so blue the reason</p>
<p>for this is the secret</p>
<p>of bliss.</p>
<p>I do think this helps make the poem more intriguing and invites the reader to move from line to line. It's something to think about. Once again, thank you so much for being a part of Poet Lady Katz. Have a wonderful rest of your day, Susan</p>
https://poetladykatz.com/poetry-talk/my-destiny-3
Original Post by Candice
My Destiny
<p>Dreams within hoping to be true</p>
<p>Reaching the skies so blue</p>
<p>The reason for this</p>
<p>Is the secret of bliss.</p>
<p>To fly so high flapping my wings</p>
<p>Into the deep sinking sea</p>
<p>I recall how I rose up</p>
<p>Amidst all the barriers</p>
<p>And trials immense.</p>
<p>All I wanted and ought to be,</p>
<p>Surprising it turned out to be.</p>
<p>Nothing but my destiny.</p>
<p> </p>
<p>The journey was too long</p>
<p>Carried on my shoulders strong</p>
<p>Exhausted till I dropped,</p>
<p>Dissatisfaction maybe</p>
<p>Each time I persevere</p>
<p>With dedication and sincerity.</p>
<p>I get to know it’s incomplete</p>
<p>And room for improvement.</p>
<p>All I needed is guidance</p>
<p>For what was right and just.</p>
<p>That’s the motivation</p>
<p>That carved my destiny.</p>