Poet Lady Katz: new forum reply to Soul of infinite burdens

New reply from Susan Katz

<p>Thank you so much for sharing your poem with me.  It is filled with honest emotion and humanity.  I would suggest, for the sake of the poem, that you try to find places where you could, perhaps, use an image instead of telling us.  Let me give you an example:</p>
<p>"society is rusted and disgraced" – "let tears flood your eyes like summer rain…"  A poem becomes accessible when we can see, hear, taste, feel, and even smell the feelings you are writing about.  You have a strong poem – I think you could make it even stronger.  I will, of course, consider your poem for Featured Poem of the Month for December.</p>
<p>Your friend in poetry, Susan</p>
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Original Post by therelatingfeel

Soul of infinite burdens

<p>Oh soul of infinite burdens </p>
<p>I know you have to keep strong </p>
<p>Because this society is so disgraceful</p>
<p>I know you have so much pain</p>
<p>You are crying so deep in heart</p>
<p>But this society doesn't accept your tears</p>
<p>It will humiliate you tease you let this not bother you anymore</p>
<p>So boy get up you are also a soul</p>
<p>You do have a heart with lots of emotions</p>
<p>Spell them out and and let tears flood through eyes</p>
<p>Let pain come out and show yes we have emotions too</p>
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